Posted August 12th, 2011 • 17 commentspermalink

The truck sits in the parking lot of the sporting goods store.

The fuckhead sits there in the driver’s seat and looks at his watch.

I’ve been watching from across the four-lane avenue for the last twenty minutes. He just sits there, lights a cigarette, looks at his watch, again, repeat, do over.

He’s expecting me. I called him from a pay phone over an hour ago, told him exactly where to go, told him I’d be there within the hour.

Why the fuck doesn’t he get rattled? Why the fuck doesn’t he leave?

I mean, it’s not like he can’t score some fucking blow somewhere else.

It’s what I thought, I know it is.

This motherfucker is a fed or a narc or both.

He’s copped from me on three other occasions and I didn’t have any reason until two weeks ago to think that this was what I know it is.

The first time was in January, the next time was two weeks before two weeks ago. And the shit I gave him then, he should have still had something left two weeks ago. He claimed he had some kind of party or some shit. Bullshit. The guy’s looking to make his bones with me.

So I sit there and I let him fucking stew and he doesn’t go anywhere. He sits there another twenty minutes, just lighting and smoking and lighting and looking at his watch and taking another drag.

Finally, I guess boredom on my part, I decide to force the issue and I pull into the lot next to him and I grab my piece and I get in the passenger side of his truck and I stick my steel in his face and I tell him that I want to know what the fuck.

And, of course, he begs off, saying that I got it all wrong, that he’s not a narc or a fed.

And I kinda believe him but I don’t bother going all the way because I kinda don’t believe him.

So I take the safety off, I put the end of the barrel against his temple and I squeeze the trigger.

Brains and blood splash the driver’s side window, which spiderwebs thanks to the slug going through and through. I riffle his pockets, grab his wallet and split, tearing out of the lot and onto the four-lane avenue.

And that’s what happened. Swear to fucking god. You wanna book me now so we can get this shit over with?

About Christopher Grant

 

Christopher Grant is a crime writer and the editor and publisher of A Twist Of Noir.


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  • Peter Andrew Leonard

    Good one.

  • Chris Rhatigan

    As Paul Brazill would say, tight as a nun’s nasty. Very sharp last line.

  • http://profiles.google.com/steveweddle Steve Weddle

    This is why you should only buy your drugs mail-order. Nice work.

  • McDroll – Fiona Johnson

    Short and brutal..great work!

  • Chris La Tray

    Don’t do drugs!

  • Naomi Johnson

    So this is where you’ve been hiding. Confession is s’posed to be good for the soul…not sure that’s true in this guy’s case.

  • Ryan Sayles

    Great story with the final line cinching it all up tight. Great work.

  • AJ Hayes

    You ever walk down the hall with your tighty whities in your hand on your way to bed and turn right into the bathroom and you keep sayhing don’t throw your underwear in the toilet don’t throw your underwear in the toilet don’t throw your underwear in the toilet but — aw shit — you do? Sure, everybody’s done that. Storey’s kind of like that too Don’t kill the guy Don’t kill the guy Don’t kill the — aw shit. Thing is you understand why it all had to happen. Kinda makes perfect sense . . . ‘cept the getting caught part. Good to see you back in action Christopher. You ain’t lost a step. Cool.

  • Syzygyorbs

    It doesn’t get any leaner than this, great ending. Christopher good to see one of yours, you do this with mastery.

  • RichardGodwin

    It doesn’t get any leaner than this, great ending. Christopher good to see one of yours, you do this with mastery.

  • David James Keaton

    love the word “spiderweb” as a verb! sweet ending

  • KJS

    Chris: Grisly and unflinching.

  • http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=547377830 Paul D Brazill

    Tight, tight flash!

  • Anonymous

    Great fast pace. And yes, the last line!

  • Anonymous

    Now that’s a good one.

  • Trey R. Barker

    Fabulous. Something I wish I’d written. Nice and tight and fast, as the good ones always are.

  • Chad Rohrbacher

    That was great — now I see why it was a winner — well done

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