Posted August 24th, 2011 • 21 commentspermalink

Damn alley stinks. Dumpster stinks worse. How can people eat this shit? I think. My inner voice says, ask yourself, fuckhead. I’m about to backhand my inner voice across the chops when the service door slides  up and Dickhead slides out. I’m out of the Dumpster and on him before he sees me. I get the Colt up under his chin and my face an inch from his. His breath reeks worse than the alley so I make it quick.

“Where’s your brother?”

He screws his face into that old I ain’t gonna tell you shit expression so, before it gets completely set on his puss, I knock out three of his front teeth with the gun butt. He swallows two of them and gags out the third.

“Where’s your brother?”

I rake the front sight across his forehead and a curtain of blood floods down into his eyes.

I start to repeat the question but he’s there ahead of me.

“Jesus,” he says. “Jesus. I don’t know.”

I click back the hammer.

“Anything comes out of your ugly fucking mouth but where your brother is and . . .” I let the words trail off and shrug.

Give the guy credit. He tries.

“He’s on the run. Left town I don’t–”

I plant a slug in his left knee. Fucking forty-five sounds like a bomb in the alley. I got GSR burning my face and  my ears are ringing. I also got a big, green blob right in the center of my vision from the muzzle flash. He’s jabbering now and crying. Eyes rolled back. Not ready yet. I pop his right knee.

He’s almost out and he ain’t going nowhere on two blown knees. There’s plenty of time. People in this neighborhood don’t call the cops, so I settle back a while to let the green blob get out of my vision. Let him calm down a little. This time he’s ready.

“Last time I saw him he was at mom’s,” he chokes out.

“Yeah?” I say and plant the barrel on his right shoulder. He’s doing his best to roll his shoulder away from the gun.

“Your mom’s place?”

“Yeah, yeah. Oh Christ. Yeah. Please.”

I cock the hammer back.

“Where’s mama live?”

“Oh Godgodgod . . . she . . . Jesus Christ . . . fuck.”

I nudge him again. Come on, man,” I say. “You can do it.” I twist the barrel slightly. It comes out in a babbling rush.

“1722 East Clark. It’s an apartment house she’s in 235 second floor oh God!”

The last part’s a scream when he realizes he’s given me all I need to find his mother and what I’m going to do to her when I get there. I can see it all in his eyes.

He doesn’t need to worry about living with that knowledge though. I shoot him in the head and he droops like an empty trash bag. Which he pretty much is. I look down at him for a little bit. I flip my phone. Dial the number.

“Yeah?”

“Done.”

There’s a pause.

“You sure he –”

“1722 East Clark. Second floor. Number 235,” I say.

“He ratted me,” she says. “The little fucker ratted me. What kind of son would give up his own mother?”

“The kind you gotta put to the test to be sure of,” I say. “The dead kind.”

There’s another pause. A long one. I know she’s calculating the odds on what happens if she doesn’t pay me. I guess she doesn’t like those odds and besides, she’s got another son. One who won’t rat. Now.

“I transferred the funds,” she says finally.

I hang up and find a bar on the other side of town. Order a drink and dial my phone.

“Hi, mom,” I say. “How are things?”

I mean you gotta take care of family. They’re all you got in this world.

About AJ Hayes

AJ Hayes lives in a small town near San Diego, California where there is no mafia . . . now. He misses stuff like "Old Vegas" and guys with Fedoras, cigars and bad attitudes. You can find his stuff at places like A Twist Of Noir, Yellow Mama, The Hardnosed Sleuth, Muck and Muse, Title Fights and Flashshot. One of his stories will be in the upcoming anthology, Pulp Ink edited by Chris Rhatagin and Nigel Bird. He was interviewed on Chinwag At The Slaughterouse by Richard Godwin and interviewed himself at Nigel bird's Sea Minor website.

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  • http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=547377830 Paul D Brazill

    Great bit of hardboiled.

  • dusty123

    Hits the ground running and doesn’t stop. Powerful like a sledgehammer to the kneecaps. No De-caff fiction from AJ!

  • John Kenyon

    That’s how you do it, AJ. Always liked this one. Just pops from the get-go.

  • http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=699341656 Julia Madeleine

    Oh that was good! Dark, dirty, and delicious. Enjoyed that :)

  • http://www.pluckyoutoo.com Thomas Pluck

    Brutal! good job AJ!!

  • Jim Mcleod

    Brilliant

  • Chris Rhatigan

    AJ Hayes knows how to flash. As nasty as they come and perfectly paced.

  • Ben

    Solid story A.J, I like the dialogs.

  • Anonymous

    Nice one, man.

  • Richard Godwin

    AJ takes rusty razor to that edge of skin and keeps peeling. Real as it comes, brilliant dialogue, great ending, and like a raw steak.

  • Ryan Sayles

    Brutal is the best word. I’ll leave it at that.

  • Anonymous

    Cruel cruel world! Great opening.

  • Julie Lewthwaite

    Savage and cruel – nice work!

  • Sabrinaogden

    Great job, AJ. The phone call at the end is very touching.

  • AJ Hayes

    Thanks You Guys. I appreciate it very much.

  • Garnett Elliott

    Good one, AJ. I especially liked afterimage of the muzzle flash. It’s the little things . . .

  • Glenn Gray

    Brutally well done!

  • David James Keaton

    yes! cruel is a good word for this one. dark humor sorta in its peripheries, too. i can’t wait to link to this next Mother’s Day. she will love it. no joke.

  • Brstateham

    Aj–would you call this a disfunctional family? Brutal and jaw dropping. Go for another beer, pal. I know you like’em tough.

  • Joyce Juzwik

    It doesn’t get colder than that. Positively perfect!

  • David Barber

    Apologies for my lateness. That was perfect it every way. Great job, AJ.

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